Do it! Diction

 No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me. They would just call the __psychologist___ but it would be too late. My only regret is __that I was late___. She’d have the coffee on. There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up _on my life______. The smell filled the _atmosphere_____. I loved to drink a _____black cup_ of ____coffee__ in the _same place______, to say _that I was okay_____ to __my friend____ after we’d spent another __day_____ together. I’d tell her now it’s going okay except for the poison. It’s going okay except for how much I miss her and _____does she miss_. ___me____? ___Does she___?! I’ve never been a very good _company_____. [From Joshua Ferris’s The Unnamed]

No one can see me, no one would stop me, no one could help me. They would just call the _serial killer____ but it would be too late. My only regret is __that I was early___. She’d have the coffee on. There was a time during my search for a cure when I tried everything to stop including giving up ___on the difficult times____. The smell filled the _____strange vibes_. I loved to drink a ___white cup __ of _milk____ in the __same vehicle_____, to say ___that I was not okay___ to ____my rival or enemy__ after we’d spent another __night _____ together. I’d tell her now it’s going okay except for the poison. It’s going okay except for how much I miss her and ___she does not___. _______? _____She does not?! I’ve never been a very good _obnoxious personality_____. [From Joshua Ferris’s The Unnamed]

The tone has undoubtedly changed. It made the situation completely negative. The paragraph was initially a story, where one particular person was trying to be better in her life with the help of her surroundings, but after the changes were made, it made the story has an entirely different outlook.